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    Angel

    *I wrote this an extremely long time ago I apologize for any errors this may contain*

    Eyes sown shut
    By a life that's not what he dreampt it would be
    Falling in and out of the arms
    Of past relationships
    Picked up from a frying pan
    And thrown into hell itself
    Damned to walk the roads alone
    A hero brought down to his knees
    Doomed to die alone
    A shapeless mind
    Overpowered by the things that do not matter
    And forsaken by everyone
    Especially himself
    Plagued by rain clouds and lightning
    A soul to be pissed down a drain

    In between existence and death
    He feels a presence sprint towards him
    Still blind and asleep
    He can't see her face
    But can feel her aura
    And read her thoughts...
    She's beautiful...
    But there's a darkness in this beauty
    A mighty but fragile self
    If not handled delicately
    A simple touch or slight of hand
    Could shatter this being
    And leave nothing but feathers
    From wings crafted by god himself

    She places her lips on his forehead
    A powerful strength is cast over him
    The yarn around his eyes gets severed
    His lids are unglued and open slowly
    To brightness that's too heavy to keep them alive for long
    An electric sunrise that sends pulses down his spine
    Energized and awaken He squints to see the face of his savior
    The image is something men die to see
    An intoxicating visual
    a drug of choice
    Chosen by the most heartbroken of addicts

    She offers him her hand
    Only the most hopeless of fools would not take it
    The touch of her skin
    It feels...forgiving
    You gaze into her eyes
    It's like a mirror
    A mirror that shatters
    Piercing the periphery
    Breaking the loudest of silences
    Seeing shards of himself
    Laying in perfect formation
    On the cold black of the pavement
    A sharp and painful sight
    He sees himself as broken
    Beyond repair and as hopeless
    As the shards of glass
    Spilled out before him
    He breathes in deeply
    Trying hard to counteract
    The unliftable pressure placed on his chest

    She lifts him up from the blood stained concrete
    Without effort without a pause in breath
    He rises to his feet
    Regaining his balance and coming to level With his angel
    She opens her mouth to speak
    Afraid and unaware
    He fears the voice of this god will be too powerful
    That it will move mountains and shatter eardrums
    And send this man back to his knees
    But he couldn't be more wrong

    The rhapsodic sound that exits her mouth
    Was the most amazing and entrancing of all
    As the waves move flawlessly through the air
    And slowly into his ear
    It was enough to steal the breath out of his lungs
    Once more
    Focusing on the sound he almost forgets to listen
    The sirens song sang softly
    "I missed you"
    Surpassing all other thinking up till now
    He's surprised and shocked
    The thoughts that now plagued his brain
    Was that of questions
    have I met this beauty before?
    Have I seen her?
    Has she seen me?
    Is any of this real?
    Snapping to reality memories come rushing
    Like feral waves to his mind
    he realizes what magnificence
    Stands before him
    And he answered his own queries
    Yes to all was the final outcome
    She has controlled his past and shaped his future
    She left for so long but now she's back
    A troublesome conclusion
    He's left with even more questions than before
    But she says simply
    The questions don't matter
    As she takes his hand and leads
    him to oblivion

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    you are so talanted i wish i had the way with words that you do... your poetry makes me feel and thats what i think is the most important part of poetry to make the reader feel through your words... writing is different from talk. when people listen to talk they hear the speakers tone of voice. they look at the speakers eyes. they observe the movements of the speakers face and hands, which helps them to understand what the speaker means. the listener can question and reply and interupt. the speaker can chande there mind and say so, they can stop and start and huff and puff. and all this helps to make the meaning. but in writeing there is no voice to listen to, no eyes to exchange looks, no movements of the face and hands and body to assist the words. no interuptions are possible, no questions can be answered. there are only these strange shapes as old as eve and as new as tomorrows baby, and to me words are beautiful and glorious.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Sweet Pea View Post
    you are so talanted i wish i had the way with words that you do... your poetry makes me feel and thats what i think is the most important part of poetry to make the reader feel through your words... writing is different from talk. when people listen to talk they hear the speakers tone of voice. they look at the speakers eyes. they observe the movements of the speakers face and hands, which helps them to understand what the speaker means. the listener can question and reply and interupt. the speaker can chande there mind and say so, they can stop and start and huff and puff. and all this helps to make the meaning. but in writeing there is no voice to listen to, no eyes to exchange looks, no movements of the face and hands and body to assist the words. no interuptions are possible, no questions can be answered. there are only these strange shapes as old as eve and as new as tomorrows baby, and to me words are beautiful and glorious.
    wow that sounded like a poem within itself but I totally agree with you, to me written words can be more effective and powerful then any actual spoken conversation and I enjoy trying to convey that. But words are just words without the reader and I think that being able to read any kind of art seeing past the literal intentions and drawing out what the artist is trying to get across is a talent all in its own.

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    thats exactly how i feel =D

 

 

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